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6. 03/13/14, 03:00 pm
one point - how do you enhance the gravity of this issue? i.e. how to focus on the negative effects on the media on this issue - otherwise brilliant!"
5. 03/13/14, 11:25 am
Says: "I love your bricolage! Like the others said, there are certain parts that could be cut down (the end). There is also a lot of interviews but they are really interesting in terms of content and voice inflection and are used really well. "
4. 03/13/14, 04:41 am
Says: "What I really like about your bricolage is that it melds so many different elements together so well. I actually like the chattering that goes on under the interview as a type of gossip representation. As has been mentioned, the song is a bit long.
Maybe there might be too many different elements, but I think you've made it work pretty well. Perhaps think about trimming some of them a little is all, but overall I really enjoyed it!"
3. 03/13/14, 12:47 am
Says: "Basically adding to what Katrina said:
1) Yes the explosion at the beginning is great, but just maybe tone down a tad bit.
2) The jokes and puns on Weiners is my favorite part and you have it in the perfect place to recapture the audience's attention
3) Yea- cut Chenoweth just a bit. But great ending
4) Maybe 1 or 2 more clips about social media, the public eye, and how scandals are easily spread around through social media would definitely nail the gravity aspect a bit more.
Overall-- you guys have a strong bricolage going on. "
2. 03/12/14, 10:14 pm
Says: "I really like the variety of sources you have incorporated! It feels a little cluttered and I got slightly confused. Also, I agree with Katrina about the ending.
The beginning has made me laugh every time I've heard it. :)"
1. 03/12/14, 06:29 pm
Says: "This is really good! This full version of your bricolage really gets a chance to dig in to these issues of the public eye. I have a few suggestions:
1. Move the explosion at the beginning just a hair later to let Weiner finish the word "mayor"
2. The chatter track under the interview near the beginning feels a bit weird - I think you could just eliminate it
3. I LOVE the ending with Kristin Chenoweth, but it feels a little long. Maybe you could cut out a verse? It just seems to take up a disproportionate amount of your work. I think it is a brilliant way to conclude, though!
Nice job you guys!!!"